The weeks leading up to party conferences are when speechwriters really earn their corn. A leader’s speech is a moment of high jeopardy, able to transform or confirm voters’ impressions. So I suspect these discarded “notes” won’t make it to Corbyn’s speech to conference this week:
“Comrades. I think it is safe enough to say that now the shadow cabinet and the NEC have our MPs surrounded. Comrades it is, then.
Let’s not forget, united we stand, divided we fall. If the Tories finish off Theresa May, we face an election in a few weeks. Polls show we would win.
On the brink of a Labour government, we need the best to fight the battle. So read my lips – no re-selections, only victory.
"But today I want to speak beyond Labour, directly to Britain’s Jewish community, and say this: If I gave offence to you, and I clearly have, from the bottom of my heart. I apologise.
I learned that from John McDonnell. He knew that to be taken seriously, he had to sever his past history with the IRA, just as today I repudiate my connection with anyone seeking to dismantle the state of Israel.
A Labour government will not back enemies of peace. We will ensure the peace (and I will not mention Trident for a few years).
And on national security, let me just say this about Vladimir Putin – any friend of Donald Trump’s is not a friend of mine.
In a divided world, people see enemies everywhere. The right-wing press have me as an enemy. They threw everything at me, only some of it stuck. Now, they will try to engender fear of Labour’s economic plans.
All my life, I’ve been saying capitalism is broken. The last 10 years have proved it.
Of course, Labour will stand for the poor, will re-order national priorities.
But I want to reassure you, if you enjoy a glass of prosecco, if you drive a Nissan Qashqai, I am not your enemy.
My data crunchers tell me this is the key demographic. And I thought being middle-class was having an allotment.
To people who want to improve their lives and their children’s lives, I say we are the party who will give your children a chance, who will close the wealth gap, give them homes of their own and a future.
But if your choice is Champagne, if your car is a Bentley driven to the City bank by a chauffeur, look out.
If you are a tax haven multi-national, we will come for you with a corporation tax to make you pay on your UK profits.
The world is moving left. Remember Ed Miliband’s so called “Marxist” energy price cap – the Tories have brought it in.
But rotten, divided Tories can’t deliver fairness and, to borrow a phrase, if we can’t take this lot apart, we shouldn’t be in politics at all.
Labour can do much more. We are socialists but we are not Venezuela.
My Build It In Britain slogan is not narrow patriotism, it’s a plan to use the power of the government to create jobs and invest in communities. It’s not communism, it’s common sense.
On slogans, I now realise, as you do, there is no Jobs First Brexit. Any Brexit will damage the economy.
People ask if I am for a second referendum? I am not for a second referendum, do you hear me, Nicola Sturgeon?
But I will lead a Labour government who lead in Europe. A Labour government who keep Britain in...”
The notes run out there, so who knows how this draft ends. But it is so out of tune with the country’s mood that none of the passages will make it to the leader’s real speech.